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The conclusion is the
second most important
part of your essay,
after the introduction.
Just as the introduction
had the primary purpose
of drawing the reader
in, the conclusion's
foremost function should
be to leave the reader
with a lasting
impression. This section
will offer guidelines on
how to maximize the
impact of that
impression. These
guidelines can be
grouped into three
categories, each of
which encompasses a
lesson of what not to
do.
Don't Summarize.
Synthesize.
The chief difference
between these two
tactics is that the
latter deals with themes
while the former deals
with facts and
experiences, though
there is some overlap.
You do not need to recap
the essay paragraph by
paragraph. You do not
need to remind the
reader of the
experiences you
discussed (except as
individual experiences
might be tied to certain
themes you want to
synthesize).
On the other hand, you
do want to reiterate key
themes, but preferably
not in a way that merely
repeats them. Ideally,
the process of
synthesizing them will
add a fresh perspective.
Try to tie themes
together and demonstrate
how they complement each
other. Of course, you
should stay away here—as
always—from trite and
cliched generalizations.
One way to add a strong
sense of closure is to
invoke your introduction
in the process of
synthesizing. There are
a number of different
ways this could be
accomplished. You might
complete a story you
started in the
introduction, or you
might show how something
has changed in your
present since the
timeframe of the
introduction.
One applicant used his
essay to relate personal
characteristics through
a child's toy, Lego
building blocks. He does
not involve any
overstatement about how
Legos have dramatically
changed his life.
Instead, he uses his
unique theme to showcase
how he has become a
mature young man—and a
strong college
applicant:
"Legos may not have
changed the world the
way the airplane and the
computer have, but for
one little boy, they
accomplished what no
incredible piece of
technology could do.
They released an
unstoppable flow of
imagination and
curiosity that has
shaped the boy into a
creative, energetic, and
confident young man."
Expand on Broader
Significance
One way to ensure that
your last paragraph has
something fresh to say
is to tie your ideas to
some broader
implications, whether
about yourself or your
field. However, do not
get carried away: Some
applicants think they
have to make reference
to saving the world or
derive some grand
philosophical truths
from their experiences.
Stay grounded and
focused on your personal
details, as this
applicant does:
"I cautiously placed my
Star of David necklace
around my neck as I once
again boarded a plane to
leave for Jonquiere,
Quebec. For the
following six weeks, I
studied in a country
where few people knew of
the Jewish religion, and
where those who looked
at my necklace noticed
it only for its beauty.
Classmates in my courses
knew of Judaism solely
through stereotypes from
television. For many, I
was the first Jew they
had met. I spoke less of
my faith as a Jew, yet
noticed its impact on me
more. My necklace was my
identity. I pulled it
from underneath my shirt
and placed it on the
outside of my clothing,
not caring if the
diamond side faced
forward."
Avoid Adding Entirely
New Information, Except
to Look Ahead
We have used the word
"fresh" several times
here, but this is not an
invitation to insert
whole new experiences
into the conclusion.
The notion of freshness
applies to perspectives
and ideas, but you
should avoid adding
entirely new information
in the conclusion. In
shorter essays, you
might have to pack
details in everywhere,
but in general, if it is
an important experience,
it should come earlier.
That said, speaking of
goals in your conclusion
is a strong way to end.
Some essays will be
chiefly about the
writers' qualifications
and intentions, but they
will not touch on
specific goals until all
of that has been
established. The
delineation of goals can
be like a process of
synthesizing, because
you are trying to tie
your themes together in
the context of where you
will go next.
This applicant closes by
emphasizing how
important music is in
his life and by relating
that he wants to share
his gift with others.
The essay has been
building toward such a
conclusion, so it is
fitting:
"I hope to continue
performing and studying
music after high school.
One of my band members
met Sean Lennon last
week while in the
Village and said that
Sean was very interested
in hearing the demo we
will be finishing in
late November. Just the
opportunity to present
my music to a larger
audience makes me
realize how deeply I
want to share the
positive experience
music has been in my
life. Every time I make
a new film, DJ a radio
show, or record music
with my band, I hope to
promulgate music that
will inspire other
people to listen closely
to the music that
surrounds and impacts
their lives."
You may also want to
make reference to the
specific schools to
which you are applying
(some questions will ask
why you want to attend).
This information can
come earlier, but it is
not unacceptable to
bring it up in the
conclusion. |